ROUGH DRAFT GOOGLE SHARE (SUNDAY UPDATE)

Please share your paper with the other two people listed and Prof. Parks by CLASS TIME Friday. You have until 11:30 p.m Sunday to put the comments/responses onto their papers using the COMMENT function in GoogleDrive. If you have problems, contact me before class. Search using LAST NAMES if their names do not come up immediately in RavenMail.

Rough Draft Requirements: 2-3 pages (600-800 words); Double Spaced, Times New Roman, 12 pt, MLA format. Include citations as needed. *Less than 600 words will result in point deductions. More than 800 is ok, but try not to go past 1000 words. 

1:00 Class: Share your Papers with the following People and ME by Class Time Friday:

1. Olanike Onimole, Nicholas Smith, Samuel Bate

2. Jordan Sawyer, Kennedy Wallace, Kara Werline, David Meinen

3. Dylan Moffitt, Morgan Schroeder, Tessa Williams

4. Ben Burney, Nate Urban, James (Wes) Seabright

5. Anna Canova, Caleb Fettner, Levi Scott, Il Doo Park

6. Katlyn McCullough, Remmick Rogers, Devin Hartzell

2:00 Class: Share your Papers 

1. Sam Rainey, David Patrick, Josiah Mercer

2. Christa Combs, Isaac Denniston, Troy Welman

3. Lisandra Banks, Haley Reifel, Kristi Swiger

4. Austin Price, Alesha Smith, Mitchell Stacey

5. Mariah Hines, Brittany Hankins, Alexander Ruckman

6. Austin Bishop, Erin Clouse, Austin Smith

7. Erin Mace, Tibarek Admassie, Joey Cardenas

8. Andrew McGlamery, Alex Merkel, Jacob Morgan

**Please use pp. 306-307 in the CONCISE GUIDE as a basis for your comments. Everyone should put comments on the following. Thus, there should be no less than 10 total marginal comments from each classmate.

1) Presenting the Subject. Tell the writer where the subject is presented effectively. Indicate where readers might need more detailed information about the subject or where information seems only partly true or accurate.

2) Assess How Well the Judgment is Supported: Identify a passage where the judgment is supported effectively.  Let the writer know if you cannot find a thesis or if you think it is OVERSTATED or VAGUE.

3) Consider how Effectively Objections and Alternative Judgments are Counter-Argued. Comment where the writer counter-argues well. Place one comment on a section where they could add in a counterargument or where you think they might strengthen or clarify a counterargument.

4) Organization/Readability: Give one comment on an effective transition between paragraphs or where you think the essay flows well. Give one comment where the readability could be improved, such as a more effective ending? A stronger intro? Or some other place where they could rearrange?

5) Identify and label sentences that offer: 1) Criticism with Praise  2) Comparison

*Ideally, this essay should have at least 3 different sentences that either balance criticism and praise and/or offer comparisons. If the student does not use these sentence strategies, please indicate where those could be incorporated.

6) Look for vague or BANNED words such as: GOOD, BAD, ENTERTAINING, NEAT, AWESOME, UNIQUE, BORING, FUNNY, PERFECT.  (If they are using these words, alert them!!! : )

Sample Outline for Positive & Negative: Google Software Engineer

NEGATIVE EVALUATION:

Title: Now Hiring: Innovative Workaholics

1. Introduction to the Software Engineer Position
2. Judgment/Thesis: While Google offers many prestigious opportunities for young developers, it may not be the ideal company for the independent, creative engineers it actually hires.  

3. Support 1: Google Engineers are overworked.

4. Objection: The work environment is fun and you have 20% of your time allotted for your own creative projects.

Refutation: While that 20% seems to be appealing, testimonials from workers indicate that the demands of the other 80% tend to use up most of the employees’ energy.

4. Support 2: Co-Workers are too competitive with each other. There is not a common goal that is put above individual achievement.

22. Competition actually creates motivation and brings about better results.

Acknowledge/Concede: That’s true. If you are highly motivated by individual achievement, this competitive environment could work for you.

6. Additional thoughts, criticisms. Final recommendation.

POSITIVE EVALUATION:

Title:  The Rewards of Google

I.  Shared Standards: All software engineers want to be part of developing cutting edge products. They are typically very intelligent and get bored with mundane tasks. They also want the opportunity to see their ideas put into real products and affecting people's lives.

II. Google appears to offer many of these needs, including a challenging workload, an opportunity to be on the forefront of computer software in the commercial and industrial fields. Not to mention, the pay is very good.

III. Despite these advantages, Google doesn't completely measure up. The workload is often overwhelming and the community is overly competitive for many employees.

IV. Reason 1: Hours and Demands are Too High for New Hires.
-Cite evidence from research & interviews

V. Reason 2: The Competitive Environment leads to resentment between supervisors and managers in various departments.
-tell story from employees

V. Additional criticisms and recommendations. Conclusion: Perhaps a google job is good for the short term, but I wouldn't make a career out of it, especially if you want a life outside of work. If you are young, single and highly competitive, perhaps this is right where you would like to be.

DUE MONDAY! & PPT from Friday

Here are links for the assignment for Monday and from Friday's class.

1. COMPLETE THIS FORM on Your TOPIC & Save to Google Drive: https://docs.google.com/a/anderson.edu/document/d/1PSEOv1UXSnuUWTeglqR85iPnErZQ0Y7NS7ozOrQwdgk/edit?usp=sharing  



2. Finish writing your 4 Different Comparison Sentences Based on the following instructions on the last slide from Today's Power Point. Read pp. 302-303 in your Concise Guide textbook for clarification if you missed class.  https://drive.google.com/a/anderson.edu/file/d/0B1CO16RQfDdIYkRTQXZoN3VFbkU/view?usp=sharing

Blog Prize Reminder

AN AU FOOD REVIEW:

Since we are writing Evaluation essays this week, you must post an original evaluation of something you purchased and ate (or attempted to eat) on the AU campus. This can be any breakfast, lunch, or dinner serves in the MP. You must be as over the top as possible in your judgments and critiques.  The evaluation must be at least 40 words.  First 5 posts that meet the criteria win a prize!

Sample of a Stellar Paragraph

Consider modeling your "game" review paragraph after this one. Although the subject is different, the precision in word choices and strong support for judgments are effective models to follow.

Backstreet Boys Review     

      There are only four of them now, and two are in their thirties, but they are still Boys, and they are more thoroughly bland and cheesy than ever. Like the Boys' 2005 comeback album (Never Gone & surely you haven't forgotten), Unbreakable makes small nods to adult pop, peppering the processed music with tasteful piano and light guitar riffs and keeping bright, danceable grooves to a minimum. But the material stinks worse than ever. Songs like "Something That I Already Know" are all lovelorn sentiments and giant, slick power-ballad choruses. "Trouble Is," another big ballad with a mildly rootsy groove, could actually do well on country radio, where melodrama rules, and things improve slightly when the Boys crank up the tempos on songs like "Any Other Way," a light funk rocker with a catchy minor-key tune. Still, there's just no saving "Love Will Keep You Up All Night" and "Helpless When She Smiles," the titles of which alone should give you an idea of how little the Backstreet Men have to offer.

Blog Prize Challenge (Prize Awarded Friday, Oct. 24th)

AN AU FOOD REVIEW:

Since we are writing Evaluation essays this week, you must post an original evaluation of something you purchased and ate (or attempted to eat) on the AU campus. This can be any breakfast, lunch, or dinner serves in the MP. You must be as over the top as possible in your judgments and critiques.  The evaluation must be at least 50 words.  First 5 posts that meet the criteria win a prize!

FINAL EDITING SUGGESTIONS & REVISION TIPS

Your final draft will be due via Google Docs by 12:00 MIDNIGHT on WEDNESDAY.

As you revise and edit, check the following CLOSELY:

1. Make sure it is 3 FULL PAGES (Aim for 900+ words)
2. Use your CONCLUSION to make a recommendation or urge your readers to think or act on the knowledge you've just supplied. Don't write a conclusion based on just summarizing what the paper said.
3. Use a PEER EDITOR. Don't simply edit this paper on your own. Before you submit it for grading, find some people to look it over and check for clarity, grammar, and organization.
4. Read the assignment sheet closely. It's linked at the top of this page and here:                 http://auwriters.blogspot.com/p/essay-2-explaining-concept.html
5. Bring your folders with drawings, peer critiques, and other process materials on Wednesday.

CONCEPT ESSAY REVISIONS DUE MONDAY, OCT 13th

Monday: Bring a copy of your concept essay in print or on a charged laptop for some line editing activities.

Make sure your paper is 3 full pages for credit.

BRING BACK YOUR YELLOW FOLDERS with Drawing assignment, peer critique forms, and previous paper & rubric.   *If you did not receive your folder back in class Wednesday, I have them.

This includes: Troy W. , Erin M., Kristi S., Haley R, Austin P., Alex M, and Erin Clause. Everyone else should bring back their folders.

Link to Sample Concept Draft for Monday Library Activity

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18dg2zd3qXBQ0BC9RHWYptFlQaxOPJyAMHcjIavbYyk8/edit?usp=sharing

Visual Diagram/Map Assignment

Visual Outline Assignment Due Friday: Bring in an original drawing or adapted image that relates to your overall concept. For example, if you are writing about baseball, you could draw a baseball field and then plot out some key ideas onto the drawing. Or, if you are writing about romantic love, you could use a drawing of a heart and then plot ideas into different parts of the heart. This can be made on a computer or hand drawn. Try to find an image that captures a key aspect of the concept. The grade on this assignment will be based on completion and how it relates to your topic, not the quality of the drawing. Obviously, I'm not qualified to be an art critic : )

Prof. Parks